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Carpe Diem: Only The First Line

1/21/2018

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I have chosen the first line, steel blue night, for my haiku. I was inspired to have a bit of fun with the haiku and so I have also written a troiku for your enjoyment...

steel blue night--
muddy waters
run deep
 
 
steel blue night--
the joker
meets his match
 
muddy waters
beneath the city
low life
 
run deep
into the cave
the bat man returns


​I hope you have enjoyed my haiku and special thanks to Chevrefeuille, the inventor of the troiku which is merely using an existing haiku as inspiration and composing three new haiku. The first line of the original becomes the first line of the new haiku, the second line of the original becomes the first line of the second new haiku, and the third line of the original becomes the first line of the third new haiku. It is really a lot of fun!!









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Al Bahran
1/21/2018 05:00:28 pm

Good fun and well done

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Susan Beth Furst
1/21/2018 05:10:22 pm

Thank you!

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Chèvrefeuille link
1/22/2018 12:35:29 pm

Wow what a nice haiku you have created with this 'only the first line' and than your beautiful troiku ... a real joy.

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Susan Beth Furst
1/22/2018 01:40:56 pm

Thank you so much Chevrefeuille. It is my pleasure and I am so happy to have learned about the troiku. It is a wonderful way to spur creativity!

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Janice Adcock link
1/22/2018 02:17:44 pm

very nicely written

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